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Flash: Tilt

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Rating: Mature

“Jesus take the wheel, because I am shitface drunk.” Zelia fell into the passenger seat, pulling the Honda Fit door close against the deluge falling from the heavens. She was pleased she managed the complex combination of tasks after downing four martinis, six jello shots, and a few beers. Little Kim had counted the pitchers of beer that had hit the table, so the waiter couldn’t cheat them, but no one bother counting the refills hitting her mug from said pitchers.

 

Before going into the bar, Zelia had locked her car keys in the glove compartment and tucked the glove compartment key in the back pocket of her ultra-tight jeans, her personal method of avoiding DUI. If she could maneuver the key out while sitting on the passenger side, then she was allowed to drive home. Otherwise she would sleep in the seat. She certainly was relaxed enough.

 

Tonight she didn’t even try the contortionist shimmy. I really shouldn’t have drunk that much. She was happy Felicia had found Marvin; he was a great guy. She just wished…

 

…that she had kept him instead of throwing him to the curb. All night she waffled back and forth, drinking to keep her big mouth shut.

 

Damn, Marvin had been a fine fuck; his chocolate dick, the stuff of legends. But she couldn’t stand him out of the bed … well, bed, bath, kitchen table, wherever a surface was flat enough. They had huge screaming, frying-pan flying fights. He wasn’t getting his apartment deposit back from the plaster damage they had done between the fights and the wild-monkey sex.

 

They weren’t good for each other; Felicia and Marvin were.

 

The pounding rain on the metal car made it hard to think; or it could be the drunk. Best just lever back the seat and crash rather than crash for real.

 

Minnie the Moocher on megaphone bar-hopping loud interrupted her righteous passout, complete with vibrating butt. Key was in one back pocket and her phone was in the other. God, what family member was calling her?

 

She barely managed to get the phone out, answering it just before it went to voice mail. Zelia, still drunk, had slid to answer before registering her sister was calling her. Tatyana only functioned during day. Her calling after midnight was either a fucking miracle or disaster. Based on previous experience, Zelia voted disaster.

 

“Hey little Z, you still at the bar?”

 

Zelia focused her eyes to verify the neon sign. She couldn’t remember where they stopped the party. ‘Tilt’ blinked through the pouring rain. Zelia sounded out the name, which was much more complicated now than when the girls planned which bars to hit, then slurred, “I guess so.”

 

“Still got money on you?”

 

“Please tell me you don’t fucking need bail again.”

 

“Fuck, I’ve been clean for seven months; why you still be bringing that up?” Accusation, hurt, and manipulation came through the mobile phone. 

 

Like most addicts, Tatyana knew how to play her family until they learned how to refuse to be played. Smarter than most, Tatyana gave up her drugs when the family stopped playing. “I bring it up so you don’t backslide sis.” Two can play the manipulation game. They learned from the best; their father was a lush.

 

“Thanks…I think.” 

 

Zelia waited, hoping she had distracted Tatyana. No luck.

 

“So do you got cash?”

 

“A little bit, enough for tips.”

 

“Can you get to an ATM?”

 

“Just how much do you need sis?” Zelia frowned at the phone. The cloud of alcohol allowed worry to nibble at the family concern she usually kept firmly boxed up.

 

Her sister laughed on the other end … weirdly. Zelia hadn’t heard anything like it. “It actually is how much you are going to need.”

 

Zelia screamed as someone jerked open her driver’s side door. The looming figure grabbed the phone and threw it outside the small car where it disappeared into the black rainy night. She registered the gun pointing at her and snapped her mouth closed. Water dripped from the silver metal.

 

“Keys,” a voice growled.

 

I am so going to die.

 

“Don’t have them.” Zelia was sober enough to fabricate. “My so-called friends took them while I was passed out. Actually, it was a fucking good idea. I’m pretty damned drunk.”

 

The man grunted, then did something with the gun to make a frightening click. “Try again.”

 

While the intimidating sound is a very effective sound effect in the movies, Zelia had to bite her lip not to laugh. Any Texan girl worth her scars knows guns, and the man had just put the safety on.

 

“Okay, I can vomit. Would that help?”

 

The gun rushed towards her as the man leaned into the car out of the dark downpour. She nearly recognized her attacker in the feeble interior light before the pistol’s butt rammed against her head.

(Words 816 – first published 11/20/2013; published in new blog format on 5/3/2017)

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New Marketing: Short Story and Novel Combos

Marketing is constantly changing. The new media model is packages and crossing mediums. Don’t just create a movie, but get a graphic novel, a novelization of the movie, and a short TV series if you can. Toys, fast food, … you live in the world, you know how this works.

For books, write a novel and a couple short stories (and pray for the one-in-a-million movie deal). One of the short stories should be sold to an anthology to point readers to your larger (and more profitable) piece. The other short story should be offered for free as a sampler, and point to your larger piece. A series of 99 cent short story ebooks on Amazon pointing to the larger piece is also a workable option.

All those side stories which bounced around in your head but didn’t make the final cut can now be used. Those little exercises to develop side characters and explore backstory which went into the writer’s trunk can be dusted off.

But it is more than just a cool way to use up your excess words. Creating short stories is rapidly becoming a requirement for engagement with your readers. The more bits of your novel out there, the more chance a reader to discover your novel and pay you so you can write another one. The more times your readers play in your world, the more they will want to see of the world.

David B. Coe, of Magical Words, gives examples of how creating stories can help with worldbuilding a new world for a series in “Doing as I Say”. Written in 2008, the series he is referring to developing is Thieftaker

WRITING EXERCISE: For your present long-form Work-In-Progress (WIP), look at your backstory or side characters. Can one be made into a short story of between 3,000 and 10,000 words? Could breaking out the story as a stand-alone provide fan service of a detail unneeded for the novel but cool to know? Write a scene from the short story of 1,000 words or less.

Book Review: Salvage

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Salvage by Alexandra Duncan

 

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Ava, a teenage girl living aboard the male-dominated deep space merchant ship Parastrata, faces betrayal, banishment, and death. Taking her fate into her own hands, she flees to the Gyre, a floating continent of garbage and scrap in the Pacific Ocean, in this thrilling, surprising, and thought-provoking debut novel that will appeal to fans of Across the Universe, by Beth Revis, and The Handmaid’s Tale, by Margaret Atwood. Internationally bestselling author Stephanie Perkins called it “brilliant, feminist science fiction.”

Ava is the captain’s daughter. This allows her limited freedom and a certain status in the Parastrata’s rigid society—but it doesn’t mean she can read or write or even withstand the forces of gravity. When Ava learns she is to be traded in marriage to another merchant ship, she hopes for the best. After all, she is the captain’s daughter. But instead, betrayal, banishment, and a brush with love and death are her destiny, and Ava stows away on a mail sloop bound for Earth in order to escape both her past and her future. The gravity almost kills her. Gradually recuperating in a stranger’s floating cabin on the Gyre, a huge mass of scrap and garbage in the Pacific Ocean, Ava begins to learn the true meaning of family and home and trust—and she begins to nourish her own strength and soul. This sweeping and harrowing novel explores themes of choice, agency, rebellion, and family, and after a tidal wave destroys the Gyre and all those who live there, ultimately sends its main character on a thrilling journey to Mumbai, the beating heart of Alexandra Duncan’s post–climate change Earth. An Andre Norton Award nominee.

 

MY REVIEW

A young adult (YA) science-fiction coming-of-age story. Several different venues touched from a broken down post-apocalyptic-feeling spaceship, to a bustling aging space station, to a plastic-trash-mining town in the middle of the ocean, and finally a city in India. 

Some of the readers complained about the unique dialect the isolated spaceship community developed as being hard to follow. Also that the tech language was a bit unapproachable. As a long-time reader of science fiction/fantasy I did not feel either of these fell outside the typical troupe level for the genre; in fact most of the technical language fell solidly within modern science. The only thing I found bad scientifically was Ava’s grandfather sociological study of the spaceship-community; but then he broke nearly every rule of studying an isolated community (which is accurately noted in Salvage).

Ms. Duncan does an excellent job of creating a multi-layer universe. From the unique dialect to the boy’s home and the cultural drift of the spaceship community, everything holds together well. I found Ava’s slow development from a semi-privileged daughter-of-the-captain to a more powerful grown woman believable, especially her long time strength building while residing in Gyre and her frustration as a non-reader in a reading society. The coming-of-age character development has both leaps forward and the back-slides a sixteen year old displays constantly as they go from being a child to an adult both in society and with their body (and the related hormone swings and mental changes).

A couple of things kept this from being perfect. (1) Yet another time when a teenager having sex is immediately punished (at least this time both the girl and boy get about equal bad things happen); (2) Ava is not a Mary-Jane (several times you just want to shake her for being a jerk teenager – this could also be a plus); (3) the instant love between the main character and her first love interest (yes, there are two, but it is not a love triangle except in that comparing new people to the people you lost) – the instant love is believable because Ava first ran into the first-love years earlier (he was the only non-relative male she had every interacted with – so, of course, she crushed on him forever once she reached the age when crushes happen). … I am just tired of the YA instant-love punishment cycle at this point of my life.

Plus side Ava runs into people during her exile who help her because they just do, people who are indifferent, and people that take advantage of her. And, just like real life, there are actually more people who help than harm even if sometimes it doesn’t feel that way.

A really good science fiction YA coming-of-age which I think both genders would enjoy.

Flash: One Bloody Morning

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Curtis and Duane watched dawn rise from inside the door of the old county armory as they checked their weapons. Yesterday a bear shambling out of woods had frozen the children in terror, but it continued through the fields, not bothering with the humans or the grain they were nursing in the summer heat. Duane had been closest and debated wasting ammo on the large amount of meat the creature represented, but more likely the shotgun would have angered it and that would have created even more of a problem. The three oldest children who the two elders trusted with spears crouched still, their weapons in hand and ready but also unused. No actual danger existed in those few tense minutes except in everyone’s minds.

Even so, as they expanded their fields to feed the new mouths, their encroachment on nature would continue, and nature, even when man ruled the world, never liked her skirts being pushed back. After oiling his axe and checking it pulled smoothly from his holster, Curtis started the same routine with the blades he carried. The gunner counted the few remaining shells to see if a couple more miraculously appeared in the night and glanced longingly at his pistol. Until someone figured out how to make gunpowder of sufficient quality, his police glock was permanently shelved. Old-style shotguns were more forgiving and, thanks to the southern love of hunting, plenty of ammunition available after civilization fell, to the point some even survived the first madness.

Duane nodded at the more primitive weapons humanity was slowly sliding towards as their primary defense against a planet freed from humanity’s control. “The spears, okay?”

“I looked them over while you got lunch packed.” Curtis hefted a light spears. “One needed the head reset, but the kids have been taking good care of them for once. I wish I could make a bow or that a spear thrower thing you talked about. It can’t be too hard.”

“If only the plague had happened twenty years earlier, before everything went electronic.” Duane chuckled blackly. “I only learned to read to pass the detective exam. It was so easy to have the machines read to you.”

“True that, my friend.” Curtis stared over the close orchards and vegetable gardens at the acreage devoted to grain, his aging eyes crinkling to focus on the distant trees walking toward the edge of their maintainable property. “Working at the recycling plant, I remember when the library books went through. Took us less than a day to clear the mess. We had been promised overtime, but the bosses didn’t need it.”

“I would give my leg for an encyclopedia.”

“Yeah, or for google-glass to work again.”

Duane’s nostrils flared, taking in the clean scents; his ears searched for any sound outside of birds welcoming the sun. “If wishes were horses…”

Curtis nodded, not understanding the reference but he had hear the sentiment enough over the years, and continued considering the trees. The young trees growing in the middle of what used to be a city of nearly 80 thousand made preparing for winter easier ever year as they won against mankind’s fallen monuments. No long trips to the edge of town were needed. It had come to them. “We should chop the trees sooner than later. Doesn’t dry wood burn better than green?”

“Yes, I believe so. We weren’t choking on smoke at the end of winter, not like at the start.” Duane considered, chewing his lip. He hadn’t ever camped before things changed, and the closest he had come to flame was firing up the gas grill at his house. Even after seven years, his lack of manly outdoor activity left holes of knowledge which his grandfather would have laughed at.

Footsteps echoed in the hallway from the dedicated dining area where the children were eating breakfast before another day in the fields. The steps were longer and louder than most of the charges were capable of making but hurried. Yo-yo, the eldest of the children, entered in the foyer area where the men were located at a swift pace just short of running. “Sirs.” His voice cracked, and he stopped at the edge of the painted line, his thin body quivering. Children were not allowed unsupervised in the weapon area.

“What is it?” Curtis growled.

Rocking to one side, Yo-yo swallowed, his newly prominent Adam’s apple bobbing, then coughed to reset his vocals. “Vera’s not coming out of the bathroom.”

“How long has it been?” Duane asked more calmly than Curtis. Curtis had never wanted to be a parent, getting snipped while still in high school as soon as he hit the legal age, and it showed in his dealings with their forty-some charges.

Ducking his head, Yo-yo said muttered, “I think she went in last night.”

Curtis exploded. “What? And you are only telling us now?” Yo-yo’s bowed form shivered.

Putting a hand on Curtis’ shoulder, Duane squeezed hard until Curtis looked at him in anger instead of the child. “Which bathroom, honey? Take us there.”

Yo-yo nodded jerkily, not raising his eyes, and took off on the quick walk toward the stairs for the second floor. No running was the first rule enforced on the survivors. Curtis already pushing fifty way back when and Duane, only thiry-two, weren’t up to chasing the first children Duane had found while searching for supplies all those years ago.

“She says she is dying.”

Duane nearly missed the quiet words in the echoes of their feet on the cement stairs. “She told you this?”

Slightly louder, Yo-yo continued, “Through the door. She won’t let anyone in.” His voice broke through two different octaves, one low and one high.

Curtis grunted as he marched up the steps behind Duane.

“Anything else you can tell me?”

The boy thought a moment before responding to the younger adult. “She’s been acting weird the last couple of days. Screaming at the babies and then crying about it. She even slugged Jasper.”

“Did Jasper need slugging?” Duane’s voice held a smile. Jasper was third eldest of the children, and the only kid over twelve they didn’t trust with a spear.

Yo-yo’s volume reached natural relaxed speaking levels when he replied. “No more than normal. He was just chitters.” The young teen stepped onto the landing before the heavy fire door waiting for the adults to catch up.

Shortly, he led them to the back bathroom next to the old offices they used for storage. Water pressure did not make it up here, even with the pumps some of the Parma Trust managed to spit together for them, but the toilet still flushed and they kept several buckets of water upstairs as a precaution against fires made by candles during the winter months. When the water was freshened, the old water was put in the toilet tanks in the three upstairs bathrooms. The water returned through the gravity-driven pipes when someone did a quick side trip while getting stuff out of storage.

“She’s in here.” Yo-yo whispered.

Duane knocked.

“Go away.” The voice was laced with tears, anger, and pain.

“Vera,” Duane dropped his voice into what he thought of as his baby smoothing tones. “may I come in?”

“No!” She screamed in terror. “Go away. I got the Mumps.”

Curtis yelled back. “You ain’t got the Mumps, girl.”

Duane stared at the older man a moment before suggesting, “Why don’t you get the kids moving? Breakfast has to be done by now.”

“Fine, my friend, it’s your funeral.” Raising his hands, Curtis turned and walked away.

It usually was. Curtis and Duane had found each other during the crazy months after the mumps struck people who had refused to get vaccinated for an “extinct” disease, then mutated with a flu strain and became effectually a new, practically air-borne disease passed easily in fluids like sneezes. In three months humanity dropped from eight billion to a few million at best guess. The pandemic took its share, but human stupidity took more. Immune adults were rare and got rarer as they fought over supplies which will last for years at the new population levels; those that didn’t commit suicide at the first sniffle. At least three countries set off something nuclear before the internet stopped working; America wasn’t the idiot on the block for once and got all of its plants decommissioned safely. The last act of the forty-ninth President was ordering all the nuclear bombs be disassembled. Number fifty-two, the first woman President, two weeks later, confirmed it was done.

Duane waited until Curtis and Yo-yo started down the stairs. “One of these days,” he muttered while no one could hear. He didn’t feel any better. He needed Curtis desperately, and the old man had started rubbing his left arm when he didn’t know Duane was looking.

Knocking again at the door, Duane shook the last of his anger away. He never had any for the children. “Vera, please.”

“Go away.” She moaned from the other side of the door.

“Why do you think you have the Mumps, honey?”

“I’m sick, so sick. And I hurt really bad.”

The door wasn’t lockable, but privacy was priceless when none was available. Leaning a muscular arm against the door frame and resting his forehead against it, Duane talked to the door as gentle as he talked to her when she was seven and he had found her half-starved wandering the street, his second foundling before he had even met Curtis. He ruthlessly cut off the memory of his first foundling, a baby so dehydrated no amount of formula could save, and the next three who succumbed to Mumps a month after he rescued them from a pack of feral dogs. “Lots of things can do that Vera. No one has had Mumps for a long time.”

“We got new people.” She pointed out.

The Trust had gone through and dropped off four more kids at their make-shift orphanage. Humanity connected through a bunch of over-zealous do-gooders, at least in his part of the world. They were helpful enough, as restoring the ancient well setup for the armory witnessed, but they meddled as much as they helped.

“And they are all healthy, honey.”

He didn’t hear anything on the other side in response until the unmistakable sound of vomiting happened. He parsed the sound again. Dry heaves, he thought, if she had been emptying her stomach all night and not come down for breakfast.

“I’m coming in.” He announced and took a step back from the jam to open the door.

“No!” She screamed. “I’m bleeding and everything. You’ll catch it.”

“Bleeding?” He stopped before pushing the door open. “Vera, where are you bleeding?”

“Does it matter?” Her voice shook. Pain filled the cracks between the terror controlling her, but a bit of embarrassment oozed out in the last question.

“Of course it does.” Firmness meant to reassure pushed the words to the small room Vera huddled in.

Two quick words bounced back. “My pee-pee.”

Duane closed his eyes for a moment, then braced his arms and opened the door. The little girl he had raised for the last seven years curled naked on the floor in a fetal position with blood streaked across her thighs, some white cotton cloth was stuffed a water bucket beside her. The toilet had a little yellow tinge from the most recent dry heaves, while the bucket red-tinged water had floats, likely from her first round of vomiting which stuck to the nightshirt she wore in the barracks with the other children. He ran his eyes over her tear-streaked face, searching for any tell-tale swelling, then down her back to her just barely noticeable hips. Hips he had never noticed before.

Fourteen. Little Vera, the oldest of the girls in his care was fourteen.

Yo-yo’s voice change should have told him what would happen soon to Vera and Belle, but he didn’t think, hadn’t remembered. Fighting starvation had driven them so long and delayed things in the children he had long forgotten about. Dropping on the dirty floor beside her, he pulled this daughter of his soul into his lap. She fought him the whole way. “No, no. You can’t get sick. I am sick. No.”

“Yes, yes. Everything is fine.” He cooed back. “You are not sick. Everything is fine.”

She sobbed louder, the fighting only half-hearted.

“It’s normal, honey.” He stroked her black hair, rocking the child. “It’s normal.”

(words 2,084 – first published April 30, 2017)

Other Cool Blogs: Superhero Novels

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I love superpower prose from Jim Bernheimer’s Confessions of a D-List Supervillain to Liana Brooks’ Even Villains Fall In Love. I read comics veraciously as a child and  love the new age of novels mashing superheroes with tons of other options: mystery, YA, romance, and thriller. I’ve even taken a stab at it with my flashes (for example The Bleue Toscano Eggs of Power and There You Are). Eventually, I hope to put Ice Queen in her own romantic series.

A fellow superpower aficionado , Eric Searleman, has a site dedicated to reviewing superpower prose. It features lots and lots and lots of new books to add to my to-be-read list.

If you love superpower prose as much as I do, you might want to bookmark the Superhero Novels website. (The website is no longer responding as of 7/21/2020. It was superheronovels.com).