Other Cool Blogs: Alyssa Matesic – Unputdownable

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For the Editing Rant this month I talked about chapter endings and the need to make your book unputdownable, but not do it in a cheesy or predictable way. Don’t let the tension out of the roller coaster with a crisp, complete ending when the chapter finishes. (Chapter Ending Questions 5/12/2026)

A great vlog to follow for developmental editing advise is Alyssa Matestic. Two of her vlogs specifically talk about this essence of storytelling.

The first is “This Simple Trick Will Make Your Novel Unputdownable” (https://youtu.be/8ir5S0Nb_f4?si=a4w9vT1rNX8BEOhk) – the video is embedded below.

The core of it is “A Simple Three-Step Process to Keep Readers READING” (the woman is wonderful at distilling her advice to three core steps for each of the 5-10 minute videos, giving you a break to practice what she has taught before diving into the next one).

  1. Ensure every chapter is substantive on its own – Each chapter has weight, a beginning, middle, and end arc.
  2. Identify the lingering point of tension.
  3. Revise the final lines of the chapter based on Five Tactical Ways to Raise Suspense – (a) Ask a Question – This doesn’t have to be an actual written question, but a question left in the readers mind; (b) Create an Obstacle; (c) Drop a Bomb (etc. – you should watch the video below)

The second of her videos I would like to recommend is “This Psychological Trick Will Change How You Write Forever” (https://youtu.be/6p4_JKpshoc?si=r1IQLKysSDlURPFD) – this video is embedded below.

This video is about the Zeigarnik Effect, where unfinished business is more memorable. This isn’t a cliffhanger, just lack of closure – a door cracked open. Truly a way to make your book unputdownable.

As before, she creates a clear outline of three things to follow (and even inserts breaks into the video so you can jump to the points you are most interested in). (1) Build up to an event; (2) Revise your chapter endings – (a) Is there a question lingering or (b) Is there a sense of anticipation or unease; and (3) …. well, this is a recommendation for another cool blog, not a recap of other people’s work. Enjoy the video below or directly on YouTube.

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Flash: Monsters in the School

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(Writer’s Group prompt of use an actual place for inspiration. Please note that no evidence of POW deaths is related in the records to the Hofmann forest. Liberty was taken for this story. Any relation to people living or dead is co-incidental. This is a work of fiction.)

Arriving at the Sneads Ferry High School, just off of Dixon, Kiara sat on one of the concrete benches outside to put on her sneakers before heading inside for college testing. Within moments the shadows of the long, covered walk between the drop-off line and the entrance were eclipsed by bodies. She looked up to discover Mandy in front of her with her boyfriend Chuck at her shoulder, with them were Tim and Granger.

“S’up?” she asked, setting her sneakers aside. Kiara glanced at the high school entrance to see who the school had hired for the special Saturday duty. Ken Baumgardner stood guard at the door; the white police officer made eye contact with her, then lowered his hat and leaned in the doorway in a way which blocked the camera lines. No help there. Standing, leaving her book bag and her sneakers on the bench, the seventeen-year-old Black girl backed onto the grass.

“What are you doing here?” Mandy asked, “School’s closed.”

“ACTs.” Kiara responded, looking around for any other aid. She had walked all the way over from High Ridge, leaving way early to make sure she didn’t miss the testing since both her parents were working this weekend and had taken the cars. “I’m going to take the ACTs.” The way early seems to be too early. No one else was being dropped off yet.

“You don’t be needing that.” Mandy said.

Kiara chuckled, hoping to break the hateful pall they were emitting. She grew up with most of them, except Granger whose dad worked at the nearby base. Heck, her father and Mandy’s mom shared a last name, as black and white families often did in North Carolina, when one family owned the other at one point and neither family were of a mind to move away from where they had set down their roots. Making eye contact with each, she said, “Sure will, if I am going to get into a good college.”  Only Timmy broke eye contact. The others stared with anger.

Chuck spat on the concrete walk, leaving a tobacco stain. The coach wouldn’t be happy to learn he was pinching. “Stealing scholarships from white folk with your DEI reversal dis-crime-ination.”

“Yeah.” Granger added. “Like your brother.” He and Tim started circling opposite sides around the bench. Kiara took a step back for each slow step forward they took.

Only J-J had gone onto college, her other two brothers had gone into the trades. He had gotten a full ride, but that had been a sports, not academic scholarship. Like everyone in her family, Kiara hid her smarts, keeping to the middle of the grades as best she could.

“Well, I am not trying to get a scholarship. Just have to take this to apply to Appalachian State U. Honest.” She held up her hands toward them.

“Girls don’t need to go to college.” Mandy put her arm through Chuck’s and leaned on his shoulder. “Just get yourself a man. No need to take a seat away from guys.”

With Mandy tying up Chuck, the explosive running back for the Bulldogs, Kiara took off running across the grassy lawn in front of the school the beads in her hair clacking behind her. If she could get to the treeline leading into the Hofmann Forest which the school backed against, all she would need to do is hide there until other kids start unloading.

Chuck was a short speed runner and Tim did hurdles for track. Granger, though, was a long-distant runner and Kiara had already walked three miles to get to school. He yanked her down by her hair just inside the trees, sending beads flying, and punched her once, straddling her and raising his fist to hit her again, pausing a second as his social programming kicked in against hitting a girl.

“Do it,” panted Mandy as she caught up. “Teach this bitch not to steal from her betters.”

He pounded her three more punches, before standing and kicking her once in the stomach with his boots. “Don’t make me run again.” Cuts ran red where his new class ring had broken her skin.

The morning mist, not yet burned off in the June morning under the trees, cooled lungs as Kiara coughed blood, spitting leaves and loam inhaled as she sucked oxygen back into her body.

The mist thickened, and Kiara felt a different anger from the soil dugged into her knees and elbows. Shorts and a t-shirt offered little protection from being tackled to the ground. She panicked momentarily. She shouldn’t feel that anger, that connection to the soil. Not outside the coven circle.

Her beads!

“Nigger, taking what belongs to us.” Mandy kicked Kiara in the hands wrapped around her middle to protect her abused stomach. “Black trash.” She kicked Kiara again.

The ground groaned low.

Hofmann whispered in Kiara’s ears. Slaves who died cutting lumber in the forest, who bled harvesting the tobacco fields clear to build the school. But they were old, old voices, faded with time. Stronger were the German and Italian voices of the POWs held on US soil during World War Two.

North Carolinian business men knew what to do with free labor no one would come looking for. Thousands of interned soldiers found their way into the farms and lumber mills, filling slots left by the freeing of slaves eighty years before their capture in North African campaigns. The south does like taking free labor from Africa, no matter the skin color.

Her blood, blessed by the Loa under full and new moons since her mother had introduced her to the secrets, fell to angry soil, feeding it without the beads to contain her powers.

“Run.” Kiara whispered.

“What’s that, Black girl?” Mandy kicked her hard enough to roll Kiara onto her back. “Run? Don’t worry. You won’t need to run ever again.” She kicked her another time, rolling Kiara face down into the dirt.

“Mandy…” Tim said.

“Scared Timmy?” Mandy teased. “It’s time to take out this trash. Just another Black girl disappearing one summer afternoon. Didn’t you see the news? North Carolina has half of the missing black girls in the nation this year. No one will notice one more.”

Granger pounded his hands together. Kiara’s blood transferring from his right ring to his left palm. “Now we are talking. Wait ‘til I tell my dad I got my first kill.”

“Hold on.” Tim backed into a tree. “This is wrong.” He locked eyes with Chuck, the leader of the group, who shrugged like “what are you going to do? teenagers do shenanigans.”

Then the star running back snapped open a knife he always carried. “You can help, or you can be a pussy. But you are going to stay quiet.”

Tim nodded his head rapidly, the golden rays cutting through the branches of the ill-fated forest zig-sagging across his face. Mist rivaling low clouds swirled at his feet.

The forest woke. Indian battleground, slave land, a secret pit grave where Axis soldiers had been tossed responded to the necromancer blood soaking the loam.

Tim, fighting it every step of the way, swallowed when his eyes crawled back to meet Kiara’s brown eyes with just a touch of green, so like Mandy’s.

While the others had been concentrating on Timmy, Kiara had raised onto her battered hands and knees. Her cut face turned up, dripping blood, and she mouthed to him, “Run.”

Inside his brain, the word echoed in a thousand languages. American Southern, Lumbee, Seventeenth Century English, Hattian, German – Run. Run away. Don’t look back. Run.

His eyes dilated. His color blanched to ghost white.

Ghost hands lifted her to standing.

Tim ran.

The three others of the mob swung back to look at her.

Seeing their victim standing, Mandy rushed forward to push her back down. Granger closed on one side and Chuck on the other, playing his knife back and forth. “Time to die,” he said.

“I couldn’t agree more,” Kiara said in a voice not her own.

Skeletal remains burst through the ground, clacking and clicking into place, slurping from the mud, thudding dropping dirt to the ground, vegetation burned the nostrils with scents of mold and moss from the freshly churned soil.

Behind Ted, running as though his life depended on it, the screams started, like teenage high-jinks to startle people at Halloween…or people being torn apart.

Kiara rested against a tree. “Danke,” she thanked the German officer who had been supervising when some timber fell the wrong direction. Struggling with her one year of high school German, after checking he wasn’t bilingual in French or English, he asked that he pulled the bones into the pit with his group so they wouldn’t stand out if someone came looking for new bones in the ground. Scratching through her memory, past her pain, she wiped her face for blood, then applied the sacrifice to the tree, asking the appropriate Loa to heal the area of all evidence, restoring the ground to health. Stumbling out, she found an Italian zombie carrying her beads. The boy had to have been only sixteen when he had died.

He spoke, or at least understood, English.

“You are very kind to have collected these for me.” Kiara bruised lips split as she talked, giving the boy strength and clarity as more of her blood leaked out of her skin. Never in her life has she spilled this much blood uncontrolled by bowl or goblet. “I hate to ask more of you, but if you could, see that those three spirits are sent on their way. I don’t want them hanging around here. The forest has dealt with enough.”

He nodded and shrugged, indicating he would try, but couldn’t promise anything. The other spirits were more vengeful than he, and both Chuck and Mandy descended from people in Oslow county who cracked whips against those who were not allowed to fight back. The spirit-infused body reached out a hand to cup her check and passed back much of the energy it had absorbed. Cuts sealed, raised bruised stopped swelling, the rib rasping with every breath disappeared from the list of offenses her body was keeping track of.

The spirit disappeared, soil falling off of her and him and merging back into the sport fields around the High School, leaving her clothes wrinkled but clean. She limbed slowly back to the school where streams of students talked, walking into the school for testing. Beside her shoes and bags stood Tim, rocking from foot-to-foot, the whites of his eyes getting rounder the closer she got.

Kiara sat down on the bench, wincing as she bent over, to put on the sneakers so she could go indoors. The beads dug into her hip as she changed feet. The noisiness of the world faded without her feet connected to the ground, but she didn’t have time or energy to return the beads to her hair and still have any chance with passing the ACTs.

Tim stayed frozen like a prey before a predator.

Standing, Kiara shouldered her bag. “You are going to stay quiet,” she said softly.

He nodded.

“Say it.” She lifted a finger to the middle of his forehead.

“Not a word, ever. I swear.”

“Are you here for the testing too?”

“Nah, we just wanted to mess with some of the ni—” he stopped himself mid-word.

She dropped her finger to his lips. “Do better.”

He nodded again.

(words 1,916; first published 5/25/2026)

Ordinary Monsters series

One) Monsters in the closet (5/10/2026)
Two) Monsters in the school (5/24/2026)
Three) Monsters in the Restaurant (6/28/2026)
Four) Monsters at the Church (7/5/2026)
Five) Monster in the Club (TBD)

Geeking Science: ELIZA –> ChatGPT

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I finally figure out what ChatGPT reminded me of. Do you remember the PC Therapist popular in the 1980s called ELIZA? The one which just repeated back what you said back to you because it had no knowledgebase of its own?

“I want my Mommy.” … “Tell me why you want your Mommy.”
“Because she cooks for me.” … “Why do you feel that way?”
(etc.)

It was very, very early AI. And this is exactly what ChatGPT is, but on steroids. It pulls information for a database, but it reflects back to you any opinion you have because it is programmed (like ELIZA) to keep you engaged.

“What did early humans do?” …”They hunted and gathered.”
“How did they gather?” … “You gather fabric by pinching cloth together at measured intervals.”
“No! that is wrong.” … “You are right that I am wrong. Gathering is when people get together like early humans.”

Do you see the resemblance? ELIZA was a toy and said so up front and no one ever mistook it for anything other than that. ChatGPT is worse in that it, or at least its creators and the business world, presents it as a legitimate research tool and it is not. At its heart, it is a mirror and reflection tool.

If you wouldn’t go to ELIZA for therapy, don’t go to ChatGPT for research or companionship.

BUT, ELIZA was based off a therapy model of being a sounding board and just listening to people and reflecting what they say back.  This made it both work as a therapist and made it very dangerous for people who never felt “heard” before. Several programs similar to ChatGPT are specializing in therapy and are being used around the world today. (Kyle) The problem are these “steroid” ELIZA are doing something she never did: offering solutions to these problems.

BUT, the solutions are drawn from the database these AIs have been trained on, including Reddit and Twitter archives. (Kyle) Mix in the programming to encourage and maintain engagement, ChatGPT and its idiot friend are offering bad solutions in their feedback loop, going as far as to encourage teens to seek out the FinalSolution to their depression instead of encouraging connection to a community. (Bhuiyan)

If you would like to play with ELIZA and get the feel of how early AI works, CyberPsych, has created an emulator on their website at: https://www.cyberpsych.org/eliza/

Chatbots have been around a long time, since the first ELIZA was programmed in 1966. This type of program is here to stay, but the questions are raised as with any tool, how should it stay and what safety features need to be added? Like ergonomic hammers built to absorb vibration and safety goggles, what do we need to build into the program and what do we need to surround the program with to protect growing brains?

 

Bibliography

Bhuiyan, Johana. “ChatGPT encouraged Adam Raine’s suicidal thoughts. His family’s lawyer says OpenAI knew it was broken.” 29 August 2025. https://www.theguardian.com/us-news/2025/aug/29/chatgpt-suicide-openai-sam-altman-adam-raineLast viewed 5/6/2026.

CyberPsych. “Eliza, Computer Therapist.” Undated.  https://www.cyberpsych.org/eliza/ Last viewed 5/6/2026.

Macneill, Kyle. “The legacy of ELIZA, the first virtual therapist.” Digital Frontier. 17 April 2025. https://digitalfrontier.com/articles/eliza-llms-therapy-bots-abby-earkick last viewed 5/6/2026.

Morales Barroso, Jose Edgardo. “From ELIZA to ChatGPT: The Desire to Communicate with Machines.” Undated (around July 2025). https://opendigitalai.org/en/from-eliza-to-chatgpt-the-desire-to-communicate-with-machines/ – Last viewed 5/6/2026. (Lots of good references on this one if you want to delve deeper)

 

Book Review (SERIES): Magnus Chase and the Gods of Asgard

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Rick Riordan has done more than just the Percy Jackson with the Greek gods of Olympus (reviewed here in 2024). There are Kane Chronicles with the Egyptian gods (reviewed here in 2025), Magnus Chase and the Norse gods (reviewed here today in 2026), and The Heroes series featuring the Roman legion and their gods (something for 2027 maybe?). Plus a ton of support material.

Now onto the Norse, and Anabelle’s dead cousin, Magnus.

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Magnus Chase has always been a troubled kid. Since his mother’s mysterious death, he’s lived alone on the streets of Boston, surviving by his wits, keeping one step ahead of the police and the truant officers.

One day, he’s tracked down by an uncle he barely knows—a man his mother claimed was dangerous. Uncle Randolph tells him an impossible secret: Magnus is the son of a Norse god.

The Viking myths are true. The gods of Asgard are preparing for war. Trolls, giants and worse monsters are stirring for doomsday. To prevent Ragnarok, Magnus must search the Nine Worlds for a weapon that has been lost for thousands of years.

When an attack by fire giants forces him to choose between his own safety and the lives of hundreds of innocents, Magnus makes a fatal decision.
Sometimes, the only way to start a new life is to die . . .

MY REVIEW for The Sword of Summer

Magnus Chase is cousin to Annabeth Chase (yes, that Annabeth, daughter of Athena and mental powerhouse to Percy’s hurricane of loyalty). Seems like Greek gods aren’t the only ones to play the field on Midgard and the Chases have a much stronger link to the Norse pantheon than the Greek. The plus for Magnus is unlike the Greek clean-up squad for demigods, which usually start hunting the kids between 11 and 13, Magnus got a normal life until he turned 16. If by normal, the definition is your mother is killed by wolves with glowing eyes leaving you homeless at age 13 – sure.

Magnus is 16 and then he dies. A fire giant kills him in Boston; dying in battle gets him taken to Valhalla. Then things get interesting.

Magnus’ upbringing is very different from Percy (with a loving parent) or the Kanes (again, raised by loving parents or grandparents). He is a street rat; life has been hard, and then he died. Yes, he had a loving parent for his formative years, but three years on the street means he values things differently, sees interactions between people differently. He knows everyone has an angle.

The story isn’t as funny as Percy, but has strong action and forward movement which the dual narrative of the Kane Chronicles struggled with. Middlegrade silliness still exists in some of the twists on the gods, but the great one-liners and flat-out laughs of Percy are less prevalent. Still, strong action, great interpretation of mythology into something new without ignoring the old, and amazing characters. From Sam, Samirah al-Abbas, of mid-Eastern descent, a Valkyrie; to Jack the talking sword; to Hearthstone, homeless elf and rune mage – each character is unique, has a solid backstory, and have goals that work together and against the other characters.

Not the best of the Rick Riordan series but then Percy Jackson is a very high bar to hurdle. Magnus Chase book 1 is still very good.

Read through the local library.

 

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Thor’s hammer is missing again. The thunder god has a disturbing habit of misplacing his weapon–the mightiest force in the Nine Worlds. But this time the hammer isn’t just lost. It has fallen into enemy hands. If Magnus Chase and his friends can’t retrieve the hammer quickly, the mortal worlds will be defenseless against an onslaught of giants. Ragnarok will begin. The Nine Worlds will burn. Unfortunately, the only person who can broker a deal for the hammer’s return is the gods’ worst enemy, Loki–and the price he wants is very high.

MY REVIEW for The Hammer of Thor

I enjoyed this second Magnus Chase book much more than the first. Establishing a main character where dying was a step up, dragged some of the fun feels down in The Sword of Summer. The Hammer of Thor brings the connection of friendship, the snark of teenagers, and the complications of questing back to the high levels I expect of a Rick Riordan book.

Thor’s hammer is still missing, and Sam – our friendly Muslim Valkyrie – has finally tracked down a lead. From a wright’s cursed barrow to Heimdall’s bright rainbow bridge, our hero Magnus with his close friends Hearth and Bliz trace clues and quests. In the previous book we visited the dwarf underground homeworld where everything is handcrafted. This time we meet Hearthstone’s homeworld of Alfheim, a land of perpetual sunshine and even the poorest person (at least how elves define personhood) is rich. More Asgardian gods show their faces and more giants gather near Midgard borders.

New companions join them on this journey when Sam brings another child of Loki to Valhalla. Alex is crafty and killing it from the very first field exercise. Alex is also as gender bending as his/her parent.

Seeing the sibling similarities and differences between Sam and Alex is fascinating; you don’t doubt they are both Loki’s children, but also completely different people. They are as different as Hearth and Bliz’s homeworlds held in the singular worldtree.

The lore deepens. I adore how Mr. Riordan takes existing mythology and crafts a story around it. A wonderful adventurous story.

 

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BOOK BLURB ON AMAZON for The Ship of the Dead

Magnus Chase, a once-homeless teen, is a resident of the Hotel Valhalla and one of Odin’s chosen warriors. As the son of Frey, the god of summer, fertility, and health, Magnus isn’t naturally inclined to fighting. But he has strong and steadfast friends, including Hearthstone the elf, Blitzen the dwarf, and Samirah the Valkyrie, and together they have achieved brave deeds, such as defeating Fenris Wolf and battling giants for Thor’s hammer, Mjolnir. Now Magnus faces his most dangerous trial yet. His cousin, Annabeth, recruits her boyfriend, Percy Jackson, to give Magnus some pointers, but will his training be enough? Loki is free from his chains. He’s readying Naglfar, the Ship of the Dead, complete with a host of giants and zombies, to sail against the Asgardian gods and begin the final battle of Ragnarok. It’s up to Magnus and his friends to stop him, but to do so they will have to sail across the oceans of Midgard, Jotunheim, and Niflheim in a desperate race to reach Naglfar before it’s ready to sail. Along the way, they will face angry sea gods, hostile giants, and an evil fire-breathing dragon. Magnus’s biggest challenge will be facing his own inner demons. Does he have what it takes to outwit the wily trickster god?

MY REVIEW for The Ship of the Dead

Magnus Chase book 3: The Ship of the Dead delivers the ending of this middle grade trilogy.
While never as humorous as Percy Jackson, Magnus Chase builds onto a universe already as deep and wide as an ocean, creating ships (banana yellow), gods (with beautiful feet), and icebergs melting along the edge of Ragnarök. Loki does Loki; Odin does motivational speaking, and Alex brings the chaos (s/he was a great addition to the series).
Great action, great mythology, great characters.
(checked out for the local library – remember to support your local library system)