Editing Rant: Take It Darker

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Me having an idea for a flash, nice and simple: fees, taxes, and charges being applied to travel based on age, previous travel, educational needs, and the like in response to climate control, using up resources which cannot be renewed, and those in control of the government using those excuses to actually restrict and track travel and reduce accurate communication what is happening in various places within the country. Cool, cool.

With the above thoughts spinning a web in my head, I start typing and come up with Taxing Dreams (see Flash from 8/23/2026), and Georgia takes over and starts talking about her family and everything is somewhat fuzzy on what was supposed to be edgy.

I needed to take it darker. The results is Taxing Dreams Version 2 (see Flash from 9/6/2026).

Don’t be afraid to take things to the extreme. One author I worked with, in the second book, while developmentally editing, I could see where he was going. I could feel the teeth nibbling at the edges, carefully, carefully. I told him to go for it. Have the teeth chomp and tear. Don’t hold back. He changed the scenes and the series went from Dark-ish High Fantasy to Splatter-body-horror Fantasy. (If Grim Dark Fantasy is you cup of tea, check out Drew Bailey’s Giftborn Chronicles series.)

I wish we could go back and fix the first book to match the direction it should have been going from the start. He knew he wanted to do a politically-oriented Fantasy, but he always loved horror so he added a few elements to his story about royal siblings. The second book, after I told him to go for it, changed the vibe to a horror with fantasy elements. And then, book 3, he found his voice and his stride. He stopped writing it to reader expectations and started writing the way he always should have been writing. Drew Bailey’s voice, now that it is found, is incredible and the rest of this six-book series (finished, except for the last book which is on schedule for publication before the end of the year – completely written and edited, just needs a cover and formatting).

So this editing rant is – take it darker, or lighter, or twisty, or kissy. Stop holding back. Stop writing to expectations. Go. Run naked through the woods, singing at the top of your lungs.

It is your voice. Your story.

Not what is trendy, not what is socially expected.

Write the scene where someone goes to the trouble of finding your author page on Facebook and posts “You M-F’er, how dare you. On page 174.” Create the plot twist where the person listening to the audiobook while driving screams or cries or starts laughing. Write the book that goes too far. Don’t be safe.

Be the writer you want to be.

Flash: Taxing Dreams Version 2

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After cracking his neck to release the tension, Tom left his pretend cubicle, the walls were just under four and a half feet tall based on some metric unit or other, anyone could look over them, and made his way through the maze to the waiting area. Jennifer handed him the next number with the bar code to scan once he was back at his desk.

“Number 37,” he projected, his tone government-drone-dead. He remembered when he loved his job, helping people have adventures of a lifetime. He was a travel agent, damn it. People should travel, see the world, explore, meet, cross-pollinate.  When did it all go so bad?

An older couple stood, both white-haired, and shuffled through the twenty or so people sitting in the plastic chairs.

“Number 37,” he repeated when they finally reached him. They nodded, a little numb from the, he looked at the small printoff in his hand for the time stamp and then looked at the digital clock on the wall, two-hour forty-minute wait. “Follow me.”

Tom made his way back and slipped through the narrow space on one side of his desk to get behind it. As they sat down in another set of molded seats, he scanned the bar code to call up the information the front desk had entered. More accurately, the couple had filled out online, then refilled out when they arrived, then scanned by the AI reader, and compared to what had been entered before with the differences flagged for his review, and everything else that got tagged in when their citizen identifications had been scanned at the front desk.

Ex-military for the husband; both a bonus and a detriment for whatever type of travel they were shooting for. Ten different stations during his six years. Two children – very socially responsible of them. Each of their children had the recently mandated two children, the grandchildren in their early teens. Ah, they wanted to visit them for the winter holidays, that is a reasonable travel, but holiday travel did come at a premium pricing…one was local and the other out-of-state. He winced when he saw the couple’s ages. Sixty-eight and seventy-two.

Forcing a smile on his face, he turned to the couple. “How can I help you today?”

“You can help us by approving our travel vouchers.” The woman pushed the generic paperwork some websites provided to “aid” in making travel arrangements.

“Well, first I need to find out a little more about the travel.” The smile didn’t waver. “Mrs. Andrews, where, when, and why do you want to leave Lauderdale County?”

“We already filled out all of that, four times since the computer timed-out during a rolling brownout.” She shoved the papers closer to him. “Just stamp these and we will be on our way.”

Tom looked back to the screen and touched a few keys on the virtual keyboard. “Ah, I see, you want to travel from Tuesday November 20th until Friday December 28th to visit family in Huntsville and in Stillwater, Oklahoma, with a small side trip to Jackson, Tennessee.”

“Yes, to visit my brother,” Mrs. Andres confirmed.

“That would be a total of five state border crossings.”

“I know that.” She tapped the pile in front of her. “That is why there are five travel vouchers here.”

“Oh, I’m sorry, you might not be aware of the recent changes implemented. While the climate change travel tax is for crossing state borders, the non-renewable resource tax is charged by county crossings and you will need travel vouchers for each county you will be passing through.”

The man frowned at that. “When did that happen?”

“Two years ago now. I see your last travel was by plane in…January, so the county travel vouchers would have been unnecessary.”

They already traveled this year. It is going to be a nightmare.

“The law passed as part of the Terrorist and Immigration Control Bill in 2029 and parts have been gradually rolled out ever since. The county travel vouchers are the last measure to be implemented and it is still being worked on; Alabama hasn’t been enforcing it for people traveling locally, but, really, every time you have visited your daughter in Huntsville you should have been applying to cross through Limestone and go into Madison.”

Mr. Andrews grunted.

“Are you kidding me?” his wife exploded beside him. “Go through this every time we go see Margaret?”

“If your vehicle was an electric, then no, but with the gasoline personal transport you say you will be using, then yes. The tax stamps on the county travel vouchers underwrite the oil and petroleum companies maintain their infrastructure.”

“I told you we should have gotten the Honda instead of the truck.” Margaret snapped at her husband. She turned back to Tom. “But with the subsidies to Buy America, the tariffs for the lithium battery, and all that, the truck had been half the price at the time.” She huffed. “Fine, so what’s the damage to get the stamps?”

“Well, I need to create a map of your travel and get a list of all the counties you will be crossing.”

“Yes, yes, I understand.”

“And do you also understand that each state crossing comes with a charge.”

“Of course, we’ve traveled before.” Mrs. Andrews resettled in her chair. “They lumped it all together for our trip to Disney to celebrate our fiftieth anniversary.”

“Very good. If you could pull out your phones and download the travel app.” Tom pointed out the QR code to scan at the edge of his desk, “I’ll show the most likely route based on the information you have provided.”

The woman pulled out her phone and scanned it in, flipping through the pages of accepting the app and spoke a few words to finalize the transaction. Once the confirmation popped up on his screen, Tom transferred the route and dates to her phone based on what they had entered on the website.

“This looks right.” The woman passed her phone to her husband. “Frank, double-check this please.”

He scrolled through the travel and itinerary and passed it back with a nod.

“Very good, now I will start the general recording.” Tom activated the video and audio recording for his office. “Thomas Ducan, certified and licensed Travel Agent located at the Florence Alabama Federal Office for the Intra and Interstate Travel Division of Immigration and Custom Enforcement Agency within the United State Department of Homeland Security. I am with Mr. Franklin Andrews and Mrs. Georgia Andrews who are applying for Winter Holiday travel by personal vehicle. Mr. and Mrs. Andrews, you understand this meeting will be recorded.”

“We do.” Georgia said, and Frank nodded, frowning.

“Sir, we need you to confirm verbally.”

“Yes, I understand,” the man said, his frown deepening.

“Very good. Now, the travel being applied for is during the Winter Holiday season and for entertainment purposes, so surge pricing applies and no company is underwriting the travel. The vehicle is gasoline therefore both the non-renewable resource tax applies when crossing counties and climate change mitigation tax applies when crossing state borders. Mr. Andrews is seventy-two, so the senior surcharge applies. Mrs. Andrews is sixty-eight, so the senior surcharge applies. These surcharges stack.”

“The what now?” Georgia interrupted Tom’s recitation.

“There is a five percent surcharge on all travel voucher crossings for people over sixty-two or who are disabled. As you are receiving welfare substitutes, travel for entertainment purposes is considered a luxury so various luxury surcharges apply.”

“Social security is not welfare,” growled Frank. “I damn well paid into it since I was fourteen and got my first job. I still remember the FICA hit shocking me.”

“Many people feel that way, but the Congress specifically defined all types of welfare in the Even Better Big Beautiful Bill in 2028, and I have to work within the law.”

“So we have to pay 5% over surge pricing for both of us?” Pink tinged Georgia’s cheeks.

“Yes. Shall I continue?”

She waved her hand regally. “Please do, asshole boot-licker.”

Tom clicked out of curiosity over to their voting record, and internally shrugged, not surprised by the verbal abuse with those choices. You get the laws you get by who you elect. Two more swipes returned him back to the charges.

“As this is your second trip across state lines this year, there is an excess travel surcharge.”

Frank’s nostrils flared. “How much?”

“Only twenty percent. It increases by fifty percent for every additional trip.” Tom looked up from his screen. It was off-script and his supervisor could ding him, especially since this was on the record, but he couldn’t not give the warning. He was a travel agent. “The excess travel surcharge is based on being less than 365 and a quarter days since your last trip. The excess travel surcharge continues to stack, and the date of the counting restarts from the date of the trip. So if you decide to take a summer trip next year, you will still be within the 365-day window of this trip and the excess travel surcharge will be seventy percent.”

“Are they trying to keep us locked up in our homes?” The pink tinge was completely red and racing up and down Georgia’s neck.

Yes, yes they are. They don’t want citizens comparing notes. They don’t want people creating networks in case they need to run. And they love old people becoming bored and inactive as they die faster, getting them off welfare faster. And, most especially, isolation makes compliance easier. But Tom wouldn’t say anything like that aloud, especially to party loyalists.

“I almost forgot to mention the luxury surcharge for entertainment travel, but the five percent veteran discount applies to that, so only another seventeen percent. The total for all the crossing taxes and the surcharge as applied is being transferred to your screen…now.” Tom heard the ding on the travel app.

The words that followed from the old lady proved her status at the upper edge of the Gen-X generation, eventually it ended with “Hell, no.”

“Very good.” Tom responded without raising his voice. “If you would click the ‘no’ option on the app, rejecting the travel, we can move on to see if other options would be better.”

Georgia struggled to stand. “I just want to visit the grandbabies while I can, you motherfucker. How dare you!”

Standing more quickly than his wife, Frank grabbed his wife’s arm before she did something everyone in the cubicle would regret. “Do we get a refund of the application?”

“No, the application fee is non-refundable as indicated on the website.” Tom remain seated. “Let me just close out the recording, and I can escort you out.”

“No, you can just stay there, you worthless piece of trash.” Georgia huffed out of the cubicle toward the door, her husband following in her wake.

Security had a walkway above to observe and a sniper ready for people on both the intra-interstate travel side and the Department of Motor Vehicle side of the building. Escorting customers out had been removed from the metrics, but filing out the paperwork was still required if Tom wanted kept this shit job in an economy with 20% unemployment. “Mr. and Mrs. Andrews have withdrawn their travel request.” He time-stamped the file and moved to save it. With it, he watched the appropriate flags get generated for various agencies monitor the couple for traveling illegally during the holidays. Only three, since they were party loyalists.

People who continued to buck the system, got an addition four, including one to generate a visit by ICE within a week to investigate the less politically savvy, searching the house for packed bags and the like.

After throwing the Andrews number into the trashcan, Tom took a deep breath, rotated his neck, exhaled, then stood. He edged around his desk and went to the waiting area.

(words 1,987; first published 9/6/2026)

Two attempts / Taxing Dreams Series

    1. Taxing Dreams Version 1 (8/23/2026)
    2. Taxing Dreams Version 2 (9/6/2026)
    3. Taxing Dreams Part 3: Lifetime Travel Limit (9/13/2026)

WRITING EXERCISE: Outline Before or After

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When writing there are hundreds of ways to prep for writing.

  1. Daydreaming the story – this is the least effective, nothing is being written and once the story is complete in your head, the Zeigarnick Effect kicks in and it all goes away. (Zeigarnik effect is remembering interrupted tasks, but completed activities are forgotten.) It is satisfying, in that you told yourself the story, but that is the only person who is going to know it. (See Writing Exercise: Unputdownable (6/4/2026) for details.)
  2. Pants it – just start writing it out. Like daydreaming, but with a keyboard. Problem is you can go down a wrong path.
  3. Railroad it – completely outline it and completely stick to the outline, even when the characters clearly don’t agree with the action. This is the second least effective. You at least got a story, but there is no joy and not vibe to it.
  4. Quick Sketch – Beginning, middle, and end. Inflection point. Rising action. Emotional high point defined. Define two or three characters and dive in.
  5. Chapter outline – Learn how long your natural chapters are – more by number of scenes than by word count for this method. Write one to three chapters per sentence. Tweak it. Then start writing.
  6. Detailed outline – Back to English class for you: outline the story, beats, and word count. Overlay character and plot arcs.
  7. String theory – Describe your story to a patient friend while using a white board. Show how each piece connects to the other with big lines. Have the beloved patient friend write things down, breaking out characters, A and B plots, etc. Buy them dinner, then get to writing.
  8. Quilt it – Write all the scenes you know you want for the story piece meal. Then outline it, putting the pieces together and figure out how to stitch the transitions between the scenes.
  9. Hit the Beats – Pick up one of the structure and beats sheets available everywhere and stretch the story over the composition and have a jam session writing.

The list goes on.

Today’s writing exercise is outlining.

“But I’m a pantser!” That is fine, you will outline AFTER you are done. This can help you figure out what you are missing in the story.

WRITING EXERCISE: For your present work-in-progress or your next one, create an outline for the story. This can be for any length and in any style – flash to five-book series.

READING EXERCISE: With a short story, outline the story. Drop in the comments below which short story you read (title and author and anthology or other location), and let us know what you discovered during the outline process.

My Attempt: Outline the followup to Roadtrip Teamup. The outline was really important to reacquaint myself with the material after six months away from the original creation.

Book Review: The Art Thief

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The Art Thief by Michael Finkel

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Stéphane Bréitwieser is the most prolific art thief of all time. He pulled off more than two hundred heists, often in crowded museums in broad daylight. His girlfriend served as his accomplice.

His collection was worth an estimated $2 billion.

He never sold a piece, displaying his stolen art in his attic bedroom. He felt like a king. Until everything came to a shocking end.

In this spellbinding portrait of obsession and flawed genius, Michael Finkel gives us one of the most remarkable true-crime narratives of our times, a riveting story of art, theft, love, and an insatiable hunger to possess beauty at any cost.

 

MY REVIEW

Read for a book club, bought the book on kindle when it was on sale for $1.99 since the library didn’t have it.

Things that make me angry. The topic of this story, the “main character” of this true-life criminal just enrages me as an embroiderer, a painter, a mosaic worker (see the Arts dropdown in the top-bar menu for details). The line “everyone thinks about stealing from a museum.” No – we don’t. Many of us go to them for inspiration, to learn new techniques, to see the past and the future in one vision.

The researcher had a lot of questionable narrators to draw his story from. He did a good job in creating a narrative.

But, let me say, the core of this story is a tragedy. Not of the people getting caught, but the Tragedy of the Commons. To make the past available to all, to make art and beauty available to all, some people think that means they are allowed to take it from “the all” because only they can properly appreciate it. Without training on maintaining it, of saving it. And worst of all, no chance of making more.

I often say, as an creator, we need an audience. Art isn’t art until it is seen and interacted with. But the MC took the art for himself and no one else.

He isn’t to be celebrated as the most prolific solo (dual) thief of all time. Because he stole from the future and destroyed the past. His wasn’t a theft without victim. His theft stole from everyone, our culture, our future, our artists, our appreciators.

The book itself is presented typical, acceptable writing. The topic for me was emotional.

Let me close by saying, if you want … need … original art – and I say this as a person who does, BUY IT / MAKE IT. It doesn’t have to be great. Buy it from artists on the street. Go to craft shows. Don’t do a Bed-Bath-and-Beyond generic “Live Laugh Love”; buy YOUR art. Make YOUR art. It won’t be great to start, but you will get better and it will become amazing. Even one piece that no one else in the world has that is opposite your door as you enter your home each night is amazing; the piece of sculpture a young woman at college made, a scarf a young man knitted from the bench waiting for his team to take the field again. It means so much more than something taken, or copied, or big-box-store multiplied. Do art. Make the world prettier, sweeter with music, amazing with food. Dance in the soul of humanity, the dance between creator and audience.

Art: Embroidery – Butterfly in the Sky

TIMELINE: September 26, 2025 to July 25, 2026

Another project from my clearing out my embroidery stash of projects and related UFOs. This time a modern canvas work project. I haven’t done Canvaswork in a very long time, and the initial stitches have been challenging. I was close to mastering this artform, but it is completely backwards from cross-stitch work, where you are trying to get most of the thread on the front. For canvas work, two-thirds of the thread is on the back deliberately. Instead of working and thinking about the pattern in vertical and horizontal rows, the project and design is worked diagonally, since basketstitch keeps the canvas from warping.

The base stitches for the project are basketweave, continental, and a backstitch. The kit is preprinted on 14-count canvas with six-part cotton floss the company specifically orders and have made for it. (The thread feels slightly thicker than DMC). The entire floss is used for the stitchwork (separated and smoothed). I am working the project on a four inch by six inch scroll frame. The finished design is to be five inch by five inch. Yes, there is a slight problem with the sizing, but I will prevail!

9/26-29/2025 (total time spent 4.5 hours; 4.5 overall) – 9/26/2025 First picture is the basic materials, the instructions, the preprinted material (with a design that will not wash away), and the cotton embroidery floss attached to their thread holder. 9/29/2025 I have masking-taped the edges, then put the project in the scroll frame. The scroll frame isn’t a perfect fit after years of no use and I had to do a little pounding to get it all together. I hope I can get them apart later. I have worked on it for three nights, plus one meeting. The butterfly yellows and blues are filled in and I am working on the black. I got most of the white daisy finished. I may be humming Butterfly in the Sky from Reading Rainbow as I am working on the project.

     

10/4/2025 (total time spent 4.25 hours; 8.75 overall) – Three nights work with no meetings, but most nights are running over. I can do two flosses a night and usually I do three loaded needed in an hour, so I am trying to get a little more done. I think it was two nights of an hour and a half and one night of an hour and a quarter (4.25 hours total). The butterfly is done except the tips of a wing and I am saving that until I am ready to start the black outline stitching. The daisy is complete and I am working on the red-coral flowers now. I took pictures of the front and back this time, because it is really hard to see how far I have come against the pre-painted canvas.

     

10/7/2025 (total time spent 5.75 hours; 14.50 overall) – Three nights work plus one meeting. I completed the base stitching for the coral red flowers and have started work on the green leaves. At some point I will need to rotate the scroll frame. The set up is a five by five inch embroidery on a four by eight inch scroll frame, so I don’t have the full embroidery available without scrolling. The assembly of the scroll frame was difficult. The whole thing of stiff to the point of needing a hammer to get the dowels into the frame. I don’t know how I will rotate it the inch or two up I need to get access to the bottom half of the picture when the time comes.

     

10/10/2025 (total time spent 5 hours; 19.50 overall) – Three nights of work. The red flowers are complete and the upper third of the picture is nearly done, including the detail work on the red flower, the daisies, and one of the butterfly wings. I needed to roll the canvas to work on the bottom half, so the top portion to be rolled needed to be complete. I was worried about rolling the scroll frame, and I did need to do a full disassemble, and one point used a foot to pry one of the clamp bars loose, but was successful in the disassembly, advancement, and reassembly. Ready to start the final embroidery portion of the Butterfly.

     

10/18/2025 (total time spent 7 hours; 26.50 overall) – Some nights and some meetings, but one push through to get the final details done. The butterfly embroidery is complete, removed from the frame, and trimmed. Now I need to make it into something. Pictures are the front and the back of the project.

     

10/20/2025 (total time spent 2.25 hours; 28.75 overall) – Embroidery is framed with leftover fabric to protect the canvas edge and make it easier to apply to something. It takes a little over an hour to sew it. The fabric is from worn out bedsheets. Please note, I have not “squared” the embroidery. It could use a wash and a stretch, just a little, but it is mostly squared as it.

     

7/25/2026 (unknown time) – I had an embroidery stich-in today and instead of doing embroidery, I used the huge table area to make the notebook cover for the butterfly. Yes, the cover for the half-inch three-ring binder is completely handsewn. I tried two different ways to attach the cover and one version did much better than the other so I will be using that going forward if I do something like this again, which is highly likely. My thought is if I should challenge for mastery in an embroidery form, to have a three-ring binder of the research, classes taught, projects, etc. By having a cover of each type of embroidery, I can quickly find the notes. It’s a thought.

Anyway, “Butterfly in the Sky” is now on a book, have a look!