Flash: Innuk ‘n Me

I jumped over the edge, disappearing from sight, letting the bullets continue their straight line above my head while the shots echoed in the ravine. Praying my beat-up sneakers didn’t give up the ghost on the way down, I slid down the ravine wall which was more vertical than sloped. Normally I would be guiding the descent using my gloved hand while riding my skateboard, but this wasn’t a concrete skate park and I wasn’t dressed, so I grabbed a broad branch with a smaller branch handle and pressed it against the soil, stone, and vegetation for what little control it could offer me. I directed through a shale outcropping into a corpse of trees which would block me from overhead view, managing to come to a complete stop after the wickedest wallride of my life. The slope still was over 80 degrees, but I managed to be completely out of sight, and the shale actually curved a bit overhead.

“Where the fuck did she go?” a voice asked overhead.

Here we are little man, come get us.

Will you shut the fuck up! I wished I could shout at my inner rider. He can’t hear my thoughts any more than I can hear his. But he could project his voice into my head. Unfortunately for him to hear me, I have to speak out loud and I couldn’t risk that. I had enough trouble controlling my gasps for breath.

“Girl jumped.” The other chaser responded. His voice deeper than the other and had less of an accent. “Demon may have teleported her. Damn demons. Check to see if the phone trace is still up.”

So that how they found me. Well, that shouldn’t be an issue since I dropped that back when they first started chasing me.

“She’s back at the club.”

No she isn’t. She is here. Come get her.

Innuk, man, I am going to fucking lock you up for a year if you don’t shut the hell up. I am not going to let you out to kill these dudes. That just leads to more trouble.

“Fuck, call in our position and see if they can pick us up.”

The dark got darker as the moon set for the night before I heard a car come to take them away. In between Innuk begged, whined, and screamed. He hadn’t tasted blood in weeks. My fingers cramped holding back his claws, my mouth ached from holding back the teeth. I couldn’t stopped the forked tongue from darting out to smell the air and lick my lips. I waited another two hours even though the smell of the other humans had faded, waiting until Venus danced along the horizon, before hissing at him. “Be quiet and let me think.”

Up or down? Down. Innuk couldn’t teleport, and I didn’t know of any other possessors who could, but thank the nine hells that rumor never faded. I let him raise close to the surface. Tougher skin and claws would help the descent. My eyes changed to his, and the night didn’t brighten so much as became our natural environment.

I would need to kill some people to pay for tonight. I would need to get that done before leaving for a new home. Not enough time to do proper research, so the kill will be messy and easy to trace. Innuk will love it. I smile, letting our teeth become sharp.

(words 572; first published 3/28/2022)

Book Review: To Beat the Devil

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To Beat the Devil: A Techomancer Novel by M.K. Gibson

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175 years have passed since God quit on mankind. Without his blessing, Hell itself, along with the ancient power of The Deep, were unleashed upon the world. Two world wars and oceans of blood later, a balance was reached. Demonkind took its place as the ruling aristocracy. Mankind, thanks to its ability to create, fell to the position of working proletariat. Alive, but not living.

Lucky Us.

Welcome to New Golgotha, the East Coast supercity. In it, you will find sins and cyborgs, magic and mystery, vices without virtue and hell without the hope of heaven. In the middle of it all is Salem, smuggler extraordinaire and recluse immortal, who has lived and fought through the last two centuries, but his biggest battle is just beginning.

To Beat The Devil: A Technomancer Novel is an incredible adventure full of cyborgs and demons, gods, magic, guns, puns and whiskey, humor and heart. Follow Salem as he embarks to discover the meaning of the very nature of what mankind is: our souls. And, who is trying to steal them.

 

MY REVIEW

Short Version: An action-packed urban fantasy with some crazy fight scenes varying from single mano-on-demon to full scale wars with thousands and back again. Also emotional character development (but not at the expense of the action), a fantastically dark world built to many layers, and a couple of flaws often found in first novels which fade into the background the longer the story goes on because it is a rocking, heart-pounding story full of twists, red herrings, and cool cyber-technology.

Long Version: 
“The protagonist isn’t out to save the world –that ship has long since sailed…” (a line from the Foreword). In a world abandoned by the capital G, humans and demons have come to an uneasy truce with demons being overlords and humans being serfs running all the technology. Salem is a lightrunner, basically a quiet smuggler capable of a great deal of violence when necessary. He has developed a nice (as in survivable) little life with associates and no friends, when one of the associates sends a piece of business his way that changes things. Life may no longer be survivable, but it certainly becomes interesting.

As mentioned in the Short Version, the book is both very good and has a few flaws so let’s get into that.

1. PRO – None of the action is boring. Every fight scene is different, from the opening fight with a Demon Bishop, to the land war, to the final fight with the big bad. Mr. Gibson changes fight strategy from single person to large group, from intent to kill to just maim a little, from physical fists to cyber tech. I’ve rarely run into such a wide range of fighting.

2. FACT – Has a great deal of “language”. Fits the character and situation (after all, hell come to earth), but pushes this book firmly in R for language alone. (For me this is a CON, but I know not all readers have the same issue.)

3. TRIGGER – One rape scene. Done quickly.

4. FACT – Male version of Urban Fantasy. Okay, what I mean by that – the female version has a paranormal female, usually with two love interests who support her but never overshadow her and all characters exist in relation to her. The male version of UF has gun porn instead of soft porn and again everyone exist in relation to him, usually with the male secondary characters having agency and the female characters, if any, existing to jiggle.

4a. PRO – Gun Porn – The guns are sexy. The cybertech more so. Oooh, the McGyvering and Blade Runner vibe is hot. Really, To Beat the Devil has some of the most interesting information dumps about guns and cyber, I actually read through all of them and enjoyed it while I did so. They were short and sweet.

4b. CON – Women – The handful of named women in the book all look in their twenties, wear g-strings and bikini tops if not just naked all-together, and either lust after the main character, have slept with the main character, or has the main character lust after them. Except for the one which is the lover of a secondary character. Typical male urban fantasy, inherited from the spy-thriller tradition. And a total turnoff for a female reader. Every single effective fighter in this book is male, even when the female characters are described as scary fighters (after their boobs are detailed); if the scary female cybers do do any fighting, it is off screen. Somehow I noticed this more than normal within the manuscript and the rating lost a star on the non-agency of the females in the story. 

5. PRO/CON Worldbuilding – Very detailed bleak world. Great backstory; maybe – no (sigh) definitely – a little too much exposition describing the backstory. Several NOTICEABLE introspections put into the book just to provide the cool backstory describing the world as well as aside breaks into the past for a short couple paragraphs here and there. In fact part way through the book the method changed from introspection exposition to the flashback breaks; a content editor should have asked the writer to go back and even out these two methods of backstory reveal. As this is the first in the series and the first book by the author, I expect the exposition issues will not happen in future books. Usually backstory is a little heavy in the first book of a series. And as I mentioned, the writer did find a better device while writing. I did enjoy each jump further down the rabbit hole when the worldbuilding reveal happened in dialogue between characters. Some of the flashback scenes were stories and some were just exposition – as Mr. Gibson continues to grow as an author, I expect the flashbacks will become more integral to the story and less worldbuilding expositions.

5. CON – Poor transitions. The first three chapters glaringly have jumps in transitions. This issue goes away later in the book. In fact the whole book gets better and better as the story goes on – usually in small press and first-time author works, the story gets less tight and technical writing skills get less polished as the story goes on because the writer rewrote the first three chapters a dozen times and ignored the rest of the book. During the first couple of pages of the second chapter I wasn’t certain we didn’t change Point-of-View characters – so much of the beginning of the second chapter felt like a repeat of the first chapter, but the voice felt different and the jump between the two chapter nearly a complete break. If I hadn’t received the book in exchange for honest review from publisher I might not have pushed past chapter three – which would have been a pity because after that weak beginning everything keeps getting better and better.

6. PRO – The most amazing part of the book, especially for an Urban Fantasy, is the personal growth of the main character. The guy starts as a self-centered smuck. The journey this book is about isn’t just the plot of solving the mystery(ies), but also about the character growth. Mr. Gibson does a very good job of establishing the personality of the main character and making the growth believable. I’ll be interested to see if Mr. Gibson can keep that portion of the story plot up for future books.

In conclusion, To Beat the Devil is an action-packed urban fantasy with great fight scenes, emotional character development (enhancing the action, not slowing it down), a Blade Runner apocalyptic world built complete with demons (and worse than demons), and a couple of flaws with technical writing (transitions and expositions) which fade into the background the longer the story goes on because it is a rocking, heart-pounding story.

Flash: Song

“Then we are agreed.”

The lyricist shook hands with the demon. Just a simple trade, ten years’ worth of income for a song he had written. A normal transaction for him, just the royalties “sold for a song”. Nothing new. Except a better payment than most.

He screamed as the song and all its permutations were ripped from his mind and soul.

(words 62, first published 3/28/2022, from a FB word prompt (Song) for a writing group I belong to, aiming for around 50 words)

Flash: Hellhound Puppies

Image courtesy of the Internet Hivemind

A friend of mine posted the above on her Facebook page. I responded, and then it devolved. Below is the result.

First Response:

The hellhounds leap past the others (demons), knocking me down.

“Snuggles – good puppies!”

“But they’re hellhounds.”

“Puppies want belly rubs?” (Rubbing bellies)

“bbbbbut”

 

Second response:

Much later – Young Demon checks in with an overseerer.

“Hey, I’m here to torture” (he looks at name on sheet and says it).

“Again? When will they learn? Look just grab a piece of flame and wait out the decade and go back.”

The hothead rakes the burnt-out demon with his eyes and sneers, “Some of us still got what it takes. Where is my ‘client’?”

Underworld weary, the overseer just waves in a direction. “There.”

“Why is it surrounded by hellhounds?”

The older demon looks over, squinting his eyes against the smoke. “I think they are playing fetch.”

A skull gets thrown and a dozen hellhounds run after it snapping and snarling, with one staying at the client’s feet guarding. The skull was wrong; white bone, but it wasn’t human. The hounds come trotting back, one with the skull in its mouth. The human plays a little tug-o-war until the hound lets go and then gripping the horns curling at the temples gives a big swing and lets it go again.

The young demon clears his throat, “So, where did it get the skull.”

“The last demon sent to torture it. The human said ‘Kibbles’ and pointed at the torturer.”

“You know, I think I will just sit here and enjoy the flame for a while.”

(words 246; first published on FB 6/17/2019; published on website 1/26/2020)