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Writing Exercise: B is for Bleed

   

Photo by Alexandre Boucey on Unsplash // Art of letter B from the 2025 A-to-Z Blogging Challenge website provided to participants

Me on Facebook: “Writing is open-heart surgery on yourself.”

One of my friend’s replied: “Just open a vein and bleed on a page.”

Another one added: “If you can’t make yourself cry, you are doing something wrong.”

You know when they say “Write what you know,” they don’t mean dragons and wizards, or blasters and spaceships, or murder and police procedures. The of-so-rarely-helpful-but-always-critical-they mean emotions.

YOUR emotions.

If you aren’t hurting, the reader/listener won’t feel it.

WRITING EXERCISE: Write a conversation between two people, three at max. You know the drill, make it short – a single scene, about 100 words, no more than five hundred (this is an exercise, not a novel). See if you can capture an emotion – laughter, anger, tears, hunger, pride … try to capture the moment to the point you feel the emotions welling within you. Cut and paste it below or drop a link to where people can find it.

My attempt: Negative One is a Value (9/15/24) was never meant to be a cry-fest [I do have other stories for that like the Ymir’s Songs duology Fifteen Minutes (10/09/22) and  Song for Rosalynn (11/26/23)], but Neg-One was meant to capture an emotion … a group of emotions … a moment of emotion? Anyway, frustration, the bone-deep hurt only family can inflict, the deep caring of trying just once to get through. A flash of anger. Rage … against everything. Never, ever being good enough. When you read it, do these emotions come through?

Book Review: A is for Archivist by Al-Mohamed

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The Labyrinth’s Archivist by Day Al-Mohamed

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Walking the Labyrinth and visiting hundreds of other worlds; seeing so many new and wonderful things – that is the provenance of the travelers and traders, the adventurers and heroes. Azulea has never left her home city, let alone the world. Her city, is at the nexus of many worlds with its very own “Hall of Gates” and her family are the Archivists. They are the mapmakers and the tellers of tales. They capture information on all of the byways, passages and secrets of the Labyrinth.

Gifted with a perfect memory, Azulea can recall every story she ever heard from the walkers between worlds. She remembers every trick to opening stubborn gates, and the dangers and delights of hundreds of worlds. But Azulea will never be a part of her family’s legacy. She cannot make the fabled maps of the Archivists because she is blind.

The Archivist’s “Residence” is a waystation among worlds. It is safe, comfortable and with all food and amenities provided. In exchange, of course, for stories of their adventures and information about the Labyrinth, which will then be transcribed for posterity and added to the Great Archive. But now, someone has come to the Residence and is killing off Archivists using strange and unusual poisons from unique worlds whose histories are lost in the darkest, dustiest corners of the Great Archive.

As Archivists die, one by one, Azulea is in a race to find out who the killer is and why they are killing the Archivists, before they decide she is too big a threat to leave alive.

 

MY REVIEW

The MC is queer, BIPoC, and blind. The last bit has the most impact on her ability to investigate her grandmother’s murder. The author is “write what you know” – with her day job being fighting for the rights of the differently abled. She does an incredible job painting a world where the MC can only see light and shadows.

As a novella, all the goodness is here – worldbuilding, family drama (doesn’t help when your family is also your co-workers), second-chance love (FF), murder mystery – but in a short easy read leaving you wanting more. While this is a stand-alone, Ms. Al-Mohamed has several other books to snap up.

Azuela wants to be an Archivist, but her vision issues create a barrier on a job expected to be done without accommodation. The only person who believed in her goal, who not only supported her but pushed her, was her grandmother. When her grandmother falls on some stairs, everyone else is sure it was an accident of old age, only Azuela sees it as murder. Can she bring clarity before someone else dies?

Blog: Two Pieces of News

From the A to Z Challenge Website

I’ve decided to participate in the A-to-Z Challenge again this year. I am WAY behind on creating materials, so everything is going to be rushed. Nothing inspires quite like Panic. Hopefully at least some of it will be an actual story.

Second piece of news, NaNoWritMo – the non-profit, has failed. They are working on closing their doors in an orderly fashion, giving time for people to download any materials from there. The problem that ended the non-profit wasn’t the child-issues or the AI-backlash, but the loan they took out during COVID because of ongoing shortfalls of donations and other income vs. some very, very reasonable expenses. They just didn’t get the donations they needed for years and years.

I know a million dollar operating budget sounds like a lot, but maintaining even my small website is over a hundred a year and I am not maintaining it for over 100,000 people to talk on and interact with, nor do I have a staff to direct over 800 volunteers. The non-profit had twelve paid staff members – even at minimum wage of $7.25 with some benefits – that would be $300,000 – playing the more reasonable minimum living wage of just $15 an hour (with minor beneifts) ups that to $550k. A professional wage of $22 per hour (or about $44k a year) for 12 people plus benefits is $875k. Why do they need twelve people: (1) volunteer wrangler, (2) weekly newsletter, (3) collecting authors and speakers, (4) bookkeeper, (5) HR, (6) administrative assistant to the board to meet non-profit ruling, (7) website administrator, (8) youth services coordinator / (9) teacher material coordinator, (10) social media person specific for the non-profit – for youtube, tiktok, facebook, etc, (11) grant writer / sponsorship seeker, (12) merchandise seller / coordinator, (13) and so much more.

Rest in peace non-profit. May the reason you started live long and prosper for everyone.
I was one of those who received the weekly newsletter. It included a link to the youtube announcement: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TR6NnjgeIIY
One thing which made me thoughtful was the financial issues and the emphasis of the financial shortcomings. This struck me hard as my local NPR station has a 20% income shortfall as it loses grants due too federal cuts; as Sesame Street is on the arts chopping block at the federal level, etc. Wikipedia is another mostly volunteer organization trying not to be owned by corporate groups. Donate and support where you can – but there is going to be a big shrinkage in nonprofits just as we are in need of social-support systems other than the government.

Flash: Brother Trade 4: Trading Floor

Photo by 🇻🇪 Jose G. Ortega Castro 🇲🇽 on Unsplash

Chapter 4: Trading Floor

Our quarters had two stop-gate doors. One from the yellow line hallway.

At precisely 1400, the other door opened into a large round, slightly overpressured room. A light breeze blew in when the door spiraled open. Like the Trademinister’s room, the floor was tiled, the walls decorated with carpets between each of the twenty doors circling the room, and the air carried the special scent of the best filters known to humankind.

Captain Blanche and I stepped into the room. Seventeen of the twenty doors had opened. I noted one male, Blue Sky’s runt from an accepted by the Sisterhood covenant, but controversial in-ship breeding between the First Officer and an untraded ship’s son, returned to their waiting room to pull out a chair for his aged captain to sit in since the room lacked any furniture. I’ll give him points for being polite to his great grandmother, but what little breeding tree we could find to confirm his suspiciously clean genetic tracking left us firmly avoiding that ship as an option. I thought their genetic diversity lacked branching.

A final door spiraled opened. This one decorated either side with a female with captain stripes painted on along her legs and gray-tinted hair cut close to the scalp reaching across to a young male her height and a quarter of her age. Unlike the outside door with the vintage shipsuits, both these paintings showed the couple naked and ready for copulation.

I do not know who they used for inspiration for the boy’s penis, but I hope no one here expected me to live up to that. I’m not sure that could even be properly hooked up into a shipsuit urinary.

Menagerie’s Brother spread his hand along eyelines, shaking his head as he extrapolated length and girth.

Jessica Sister-Trading-Conglomerate-Central-Marketplace, Trademinister of the Brother Trade, entered the room. Parsley dropped his hand immediately.

“Welcome all to the Brother’s Trade. I’m pleased to report seventeen ships are available to trade. I know you were hoping for eighteen, but one ship has been removed from the Sisterhood for violations. From the seventeen ships, we have thirty-two Trades today. I know everyone has reviewed the catalog entries.” She paused, looking around the room where Captains and their Brothers stood outside their waiting rooms. “Two entries were challenged for their valuation. They have been reviewed by an independent council and both original valuations stand. Their ships need to transfer the five percent fee before the floor opens.”

I noticed the independent council hadn’t been named. Likely one of the other board members with a vested interest since the members are paid a percentage of the weekly station’s profit. Hardly independent review.

“Thank you,” Jessica said after a moment. “When a trade has been agreed upon, please come into my office to register the Brother ship transfer. Remember all crew members should review the ship’s contract before signing a transfer agreement.”

Like any male here had a choice in the transfer. I forced my face into the stillness Trade had taught me.

“Fair Trade and Good Harvest,” the trademinister said before stepping into her sensor-laden suite. I bet every room and computer on this station fed into one Trademinister’s computer or other. The aggregate data sitting somewhere below my feet made my mind twitch.

Derby’s captain, dragging her thirty-year-old crewman, folded space to the Blue Sky captain. Without children to trade, the mailrunners needed to change out their males before they became too old and Garlic was pushing it. Derby must think her older Brother could be traded value-for-value with the questionable genetics of Blue Sky. Having run checks on the ship-pools for both, I knew neither had extra money or contracts to sweeten the pot. For them, that was the best trade in the room. After a short conversation, without a doubt, they would be the first to go into Jessica’s lair.

Likewise, We Land moved like they had a mail-run to lift over to Metals and Ores. Onion, slunk behind his captain, favoring a leg. Metals had three males to trade, but all looked…off…in their shipsuits. Captain Tilly had one of them open his mouth, before quickly shifting her interest to Collections whose captain, despite having two men to trade, just raised an eyebrow to the mail-run operator. Finally, captain made her way to Faithful with their ten males to trade.

All of us males are named after ship-growing plants hence the Good Harvest wishes by the trademinister. We are harvest grown to age to be traded. The young men around the room had names Lettuce, Riceman, Choy, Wheatie, and Cabbage. Everyone’s last name was their contracted ship name and the final part of the name within the Sisterhood was the highest ranked ship’s duty for their share of the ship-pool, for example my listed catalog entry named me: Peasbody Really-Radical-Stock, Third-Pilot. Everyone used first names shipboard as we shared a ship name. Of the males in the room, only half had a ship duty listed other than Brother.

The captain and Menagerie met halfway and started talking. Parsley and I discussed the proportions of the painting. He really would be a good fit for the ship, if he stayed clear of Tamar, but I could hear the people who held the purses coming to an impasse. Menagerie wasn’t willing to provide the extra funds needed for the psychological software Parsley required for full healing, and Blanche didn’t want to spend the ship-pool to benefit one crewmember, however worthy the cause. Agreeing to disagree, the entertainment expert moved toward the financial ship who might have deeper pursestrings.

They didn’t according to my admittedly quick review. I didn’t spend too much time on them since we had already ruled them out for personality incompatiblites.

We turned to The Trinkets Trolley, to discover they were in deep discussions with the Faithful captain while We Land fumed nearby. The agricultural ship had only brought one trader for its ten males. Several singleton ships hovered nearby waiting their turn carefully avoiding eye contact with each other.

The Prestigious Sisterhood of Athena Mercenaries used the special dispensation allowing ships to bring one trader per three males to trade and had broken up their twelve males into four groups of three: one with the Athena captain, who all the other captains were trying to talk to, one with the first officer, one with their trademinister, and one with supply. Supplyminister Perrie, was the one who waylaid as we tried to figure out who to trade with.

“Afternoon Captain Blanche,” the woman stood even with my mother but looked taller, standing straight as a board, three men only four inches taller than her lined up military straight behind her. Green Beans, Jalapenos, and I could not remember the third one. He had been a complete no for our ship’s capability.

Carrot! I was disappointed he didn’t have orange or purple hair.

“Ship’s minister,” my mother gave her a nod of respect. Some ship’s captains might consider Supply reaching out an insult, but my captain knew better.. Even though as a ship’s captain, Blanche outranked Perrie, as Supply of the Athena, the minister supervised four times as many people than existed total on the Radical, including the men and children.

“We, Captain Raquel and the Athena crew, noticed Radical had a pilot-upgraded Brother available.”

My captain kept her eyes forward on the Trade. “He is also full-certified and has been sitting in the third seat for four years.”

“That is a lot of investment.” The woman’s eyes drifted over to me. “Is this him?”

“Yes.”

“Hmm. Looks lazy. Think you can stand at parade rest, Harvest boy?” Her voice had an edge which made me want to pull back my hunched shoulders.

I glanced at my mother, then dropped my eyes to her hands. No opinion. This wasn’t one of the options I liked. My children would be soldiers fighting in other people’s wars until they died making profit for the ship and the Board. Unlike most ships, they used artificial wombs. I might not even get assigned to a berth of crew to be a husband. But our options were closing quickly, and having seen the organizational difference between the Faithful and the Athena in this room, knowing my personal tolerance for disorganization which I had inherited from my gene-donor, of the options available, this would be the best trade for me.

“No,” I said firmly.

Perrie tilted her head. “Very well, nice doing—”

I interrupted. “I’m not a Harvest boy; I’m a Brother and expect to be addressed appropriately during Trade.”

She snorted in surprise and Jalapenos laughed. “Spoken like a full pilot. Could you stand up straight, Brother? I liked to see what I am trading for.”

Rolling back my shoulders, I straightened my legs and stood at my full height, putting me over a decimeter above everyone in the room.

“Hmm. Not a good size for fighter pilots, but that could be fixed in the tube.” Pierre nodded at my mother. “See if any of these Brothers are good for you. They are the best match we have to your ship’s profile. The dark skin one has a full crafting suite installed, compatible with your fabrication shop. While you examine they, would you mind me reviewing your crew?”

And with that little exchange, she had revealed valuable information. Athena specifically assembled options just to trade for me. They wanted me. And unlike many ships, their ship-pool was deep.

“Pilot?” The captain looked up at me, brown eyes to brown eyes.

I nodded. This was the trade we were going to get. And I think it would be an acceptable one for me and a very good one for the ship.

(words 1,627; first published 5/24/2026)

Brother Trade series
Chapter 1: Radical Docking (3/9/2025)
Chapter 2: A Catalog Entry (3/16/2025)
Chapter 3: Ship Choice (3/23/2025)
Chapter 4: Trading Floor (3/30/2025)

Other Cool Blogs: Snippet Sunday

Do you need encouragement to write a little something to drop each Sunday, but don’t want the commitment of a full-time blog, maybe the Snippet Sunday facebook group can help. They are found here:

https://www.facebook.com/groups/SnippetSunday/

Their opening is: Welcome to Snippet Sunday, where writers come together to share a few sentences of their current project–whether it’s a recently released novel, a WIP (work in progress), or an older manuscript that’s being revived. Intended to hook readers, gather feedback and build an author’s fan base, Snippet Sunday is the FB group that does all three. Please read the group’s guidelines, ask any questions in the comments, and feel free to join!

They aren’t really great at dropping a reminder each week; it seems to be more of a vibe thing. But connecting to a community is important and maybe this one is a good fit for you.

ALSO READERS!!!! – Want to meet new authors, this is a good choice – and you can paw back through their history to find all kinds of prizes.