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Flash: Orchid Monks

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Worm-hole was nearly complete. Vincent looked longingly at the caffeine pot set to start as soon as the power returned to general colony control. In the meantime, he activated the final exchange, this one directed to their sister colony in the MarkNineZebra sector.

“Oh thank the Grounds it is finally Wednesday. Everest, you got to help us!”

The communication specialist jumped in his chair at the unexpected verbal contact. His hands danced over the control console to activate the microphone. “What is wrong, my friend?”

“We have an infestation of those orchid monks. Already glass structures have been raised. How did you get rid of them?”

“Ah, let me send you the contact information for the extractor we hired.” After calling up the contact IP, Vincent quickly tacked on the databit to the agricultural exchange, marking his addition for immediate unravel.

The wormhole exchange and quantum computers provided instantaneous information transfer. “G-G-Grounds and Air! You hired a dark mercenary.” The woman at the other end sputtered with shock.

“I know, I know. But we tried everything and only this worked” Vincent reassured eyeing the information exchange countdown. Only seconds remained. “Use him, please. Yu’gl and only Yu’gl can prevent florist friars.”

(Words 201; first published 11/17/2019)

Editing Rant: What Genre is This?

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I’m slush reading again. On the third or fourth page, I’m still trying to get a handle on the genre – is this a farce? is the author really trying for a comedy or are they really this bad? I pop over to look at the cover letter/email, nope, no clue there … wait! This is really a science fiction story, not a fantasy? You’re kidding me.

When writing, let the reader know what genre you are writing by the end of the first page. Even for mash-ups a western sci-fi or romance-paranormal. This can be done with how you introduce characters, or action, or just things in the scene.

Carol checked her make-up and interview outfit one last time.  Stepping out of the car, she grabbed the lint roller and ran it over her skirt. Her other self always leaves cat hair after the clowder meets, and the white hairs clung to the black fabric. Klaus Enterprises was a dream job, and she was interviewing with the man himself.

The bar was dark. Carol’s eyes drilled in, the cybernetics adjusting quickly to the light levels, searching for a captain to get her off this hell planet.

The body bleed out long before Carol had been called in. She studied the chalked outline and amount of blood. Not a vampire this time.

Define the expectation, only a hint is needed. But deliver a reassurance to the reader the inside of the book matches the cover. I’ve read books where the first half was a coming-of-age story and then it became a romance (cover: man being held by two women), where a solid sci-fi military suddenly adds vampires in the last three chapters (cover: spaceship over treescape), and where a western-steampunk ends up actually being a space opera (cover: colors). While genre flips are okay, too sudden a flip turns off readers. Foreshadowing helps. Just a line here or there can provide the worldbuilding background, so when the steampunk ends up in space the reader goes, “yeah, I see that” not “where the heck did that come from and how does it connect with the first half of the book?”

With Amazon samples and bookstore first page reads, setting genre expectations from the get-go can hook a reader. Not verifying the genre can kill sales.

Blog: End of an Era

Today I am publishing the last reprint of flashes from my first blog, from now on all flashes will be new. Time to push new limits!

For 2020, a new text flash will happen the first and third Sundays and visual flashes will happen the second and fourth Sundays, with the fifth Sunday being 2000 words. I don’t know if I am going to do special themes or topics as yet. Time will tell.

Enjoy the ride,

Erin

Flash: I Am Prophecy – Part 5

Caught with her hand on the door, nearly fully recovered from time lost at the closet, Vixen shoulders slumped and she turned.

“Up, up.” Her mother directed as she stood and made her way over.

Two minutes play room before a DNA test would be required.

Vixen raised her chin and squared her shoulders, thrusting forward her newly formed chest. Her breasts came out even further than she expected after months of hiding them in binding. She was going to have to be careful not to hit things with them, like she did with her suddenly too long arms and legs. Being clumsy was frustrating.

“Spin, there is a love.” Her mother’s first wrinkles stood out when she smiled. “My girl is all grown up. Not even the uniform can hide your beauty.”  She tapped the belt on her designer outfit, considering. “I’m going to see if a closet update is possible; the tailoring on that blouse isn’t quite right.”

Her mother always had appreciated appearance over brains even though Tamatha’s ability to memorize every script in a single read proved her brains outweighed even her famous beauty. Father would not have contracted a fool, no matter how beautiful or famous, though he admitted once he was still fairly infatuated with Tamatha despite their contact being dissolved for years.

Vixen returned the smile, forcing her face to react as it would have yesterday. Before she knew, before she understood. An aging starlet getting fewer and fewer parts every year, no matter how skilled an actress she was, would become depressed. Unfortunately her brains and acting ability would let her hide her mental state from the monitors until it was too late. The question was who would die first, the daughter by cleansing or the mother by suicide.

“Air kisses mom?” Inside the carefully constructed bored and indifferent but not quite indifferent exterior a teenager would have – acting was much harder than it looked – Vixen searched the future for paths to help her mother.

The hologram leaned in and kissed the air either side of the half-helm before whispering, “Tell Osantos you are not allowed to watch any more rated entertainment at his place.”

Dashing out the door sadly gratified by another day won with her mother, Vixen realized she hadn’t needed to use her Unnatural abilities at all. Lesson learned: physic abilities are not always needed.

Mental puzzles entertained the actress. Searching out information real-time without being obvious to her daughter had challenged her, not knowing Vixen could see exactly what she had done as soon as Tamatha had finished it. Maybe mom would even change the program for the kitchen. Vixen could not see the action clearly, her mother was less predictable than the wind. But today her parent will live; the poison purchased would stay in its box.

The question was, would Vixen? Would she survive the next hour, let alone the next day?

(words 486; first published 11/10/2019)