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Flash: Second Person

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“That’s far enough now.”

You spin, and behind you are four armed maskers. The end of the world wasn’t bad enough, people had to make it worse. Two automatics, one pistol, and a god-nose – a plasma thrower to burn infected. COVID continues mutate faster than the few scientists not drafted for climate change could keep up.

Putting out your hands, you say, “I’m just scavenging, I don’t mean any harm.”

The one with the pistol says, “We noticed, but, like we said, that’s far enough. Turn around.”

“Please, there is nothing behind.” Hunger makes you dizzy, weak, and whiny. Only the recent rains keeps you upright, your canteens full.

“And nothing ahead.”

The story of everywhere now. The few countries able to claw civilization back from hurricanes, tornados, heat waves, and blizzards took no immigrants. Those without government took no prisoners.

Desperate, you plead, stuttering, “Is … is there … anything … anything you nee—”

“No.” Came back firmly without letting you finish your question.

The stone structures, if fixed up, could offer safety in the winter months. “Could I, maybe—”

“No.” The one with the pistol raises it.

Sighing, you debate eating the bullet, but what has kept you moving the last four years turns you around. Looking over your shoulder, you offer, “May your crops grow well and your water be fresh.”

They don’t move. You walk away from your old college campus wondering if your old professors or classmates are behind those masks.

(words 248, first published 8/27/23)

Other Cool Blogs: Alliance of Independent Authors (ALLi)

From the Internet Hive Mind

The Alliance of Independent Authors is one of the more helpful professional organizations to be part of. Mr. Hartness says it saves him tons in fees as a small-press publisher, though mileage may vary with personal production.

Additional they have great articles like “Why Indie Authors Need Literary Executors & How to Appoint One” (by Maggie Lunch, 1/11/2019). – URL: https://selfpublishingadvice.org/literary-executors

In the article, it describes why you need someone to oversee the intellectual property of your estate. 

Don’t leave family holding the bag, especially those without any understanding of or interest in the publishing community.

Writing Exercise: Show Don’t Tell

From the Internet Hive Mind

Earlier this month, I shared a Magical Words on the need to tell instead of show, when telling keeps the story moving. Today’s writing exercise is flipping that advice to the more traditional Show Don’t Tell.

Carrie Ryan, in a Magical Words post from April 16, 2011, wrote about “The Reader Experience”.

Both Faith Hunter and Carrie Ryan’s advice center around the reader. When showing, not telling, a writer is immersing the reader into the characters and action. When telling, not showing, the “camera” is pulled away from the action, letting things happen offscreen or, at least, more impersonally. My attempt at the Writing Exercise for the Tell, Don’t Show advice has a person getting out of the vehicle, climbing their front steps, and opening their front door. Not usually something necessary in a story at all. Ms. Ryan gives several examples of Tell vs. Show examples for when showing is better than the telling.

Again the URL is . Be sure to read the comments so you can understand “Experience, don’t dictate.”

WRITING EXERCISE: Write something as a TELL instead of a SHOW that should be a SHOW, and then rewrite the same something as a SHOW. Finally explain why SHOWING was necessary in this case.

My Attempt

Tell instead of Show: I felt invaded, not only by the dead body in my living room, but also by the killer. There had to be a killer based on the three bullets holes neatly spaced across the chest black with crusted blood.

Show instead of Tell: My lunch pail and purse dropped to the floor, and my stomach dropped even further bringing me to my knees. I cover my mouth, gasping for breath, tears of panic teasing the corners of my eyes. Pressing my mouth, I push all emotions back inside. I force myself to break eye contact with the glazed sightless dead eyes, dragging my watery vision across the dead body with three neat bullet holes in its chest to my purse. Risking everything, I lift my hands from my mouth, take two big gulps of air and dive in with both hands, searching for my cell phone. 9-1-1. As I hit the second one on the screen, I realized I knew the body, which meant I also knew the killer.

Answering the question: As before, showing takes longer than telling, but the emotions are necessary.

Show and Tell Series
Part 1 – 8/3/2023
Part 2 – 8/22/2023

Flash: Whirlwind

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Diving into the grass, lightning sizzled overhead. Janice kept rolling, concentrating on her words and hand gestures. Stupid warlock with a wand cutting the casting time in half, but she finally had time to finesse her best spell, a whirlwind of fire. Rising to her knees, she released it at the bastard. Dodge that.

(words 54, first published 8/20/2023)

Geeking Science: The DNA of Political Science

Twisted science happens when politics drives the results. Makes the truth go to the dark side.

But what is a scientist to do when their funding comes from a corporation, person, or political organization?

Fiddle with the statistics, of course. Because if you fiddle enough, maybe, you get the results your benefactor/captor wants.

The most recent example of this comes from Florida and is related to COVID, where the Florida Surgeon General released an analysis claiming “an increased risk of cardiac-related death among men 18-39” who take the COVID vaccine. To get that result, six different statistical analysis were run, with a lot of relevant information dropped between drafts, until the Florida governor and his Surgeon General got a result of “vaccination bad”. Your Local Epidemiologist released an article on 27 April 2023 on the “Evolution of Florida vaccine analysis.” It’s fascinating and frightening.

A stark reminder that while trusting Science is a good thing, reviewing the behind-the-scenes politics may also be required. From “herbal remedies” to “diet science” to “four out of five…,” truth gets twisted from the basic research. If, indeed, the research was even done according to the scientific peer-review method.

Fear, funding, and freedom all impact what science can reveal.

Bibliography

CDC.gov. “Flu Season.” Centers for Disease Control and Prevention. (undated) . – last viewed 4/27/2023.

Chitty Chitty Bang Bang. “The Roses of Success”. (1968)

Jetelina, Katelyn and Kristen Panthagani, MD, PhD. “Evolution of Florida vaccine analysis.” Your Local Epidemiologist. (April, 27, 2023) https://yourlocalepidemiologist.substack.com/p/evolution-of-florida-vaccine-analysis?utm_medium=email&fbclid=IwAR03IJq0RbPPvDKL_DQu6CQqR7o1xnbWa8GgYZy4BtnPo-syRwwTIoPFoKA – last viewed 4/27/2023.

Megan Ciafre. “Sith Lord Transformation”. (2023)

Nickelback. “She Keep Me Up.” (2015) – the words and music for “twisted trickster” sound bite